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    dots Submission Name: fire and icedots
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    Author: papalegba
    ASL Info:    45/male/schenectady ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 52/42/28
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsfire and icedots
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    there is a fire in my heart
    with all the evil
    in the world
    that brings me
    to have a block of ice
    in my soul




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 09:19:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm i dont know about this one i think that it flows great untill the last line i dont know i think that maybe if you change it to "a block of ice" or something like that it would flow better but this is just me i could be way off base so it was just a suggestion otherwise i thought for being so short it was pretty good take care adios....Joy
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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