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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 584
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Religious
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    'please Lord forgive me for all my sins
    my life is all i have to live
    i can't survive on what they've got to give
    so i'm just trying to live,i'm just trying to live'

    The digital age, printed on a lyricist's page,
    For a minimum wage, working like a primitive ape.
    Indiscriminate hate forms, yet in the midst of a change,
    wars wage to gain peace for my millitant brain.
    Still hid in a cage, trapped, so i spit an array ,
    Venomous spray to protect me from this trecherous way.
    Heaven dispayed before my eyes once the devil is slain,
    legend is made fact now that the level's been claimed.
    Lay and i wait in camoflage,infra-red spec's,
    Ear to the ground, eyes peel'd, instant death's next.
    Listeners head's sent back/forward, have em flex their necks,
    On a mission again with vision and precision at best.
    Through the solemn livin, tied by the lies of a politition,
    Lost in sinnin, i find mind to write a toxic rhythm.
    One of God's sick children singing bitter sweet symphony's,
    In between love and hate is the runaway's epiphany.

    'please Lord forgive me for all my sins
    my life is all i have to live
    i can't survive on what they've got to give
    so i'm just trying to live,i'm just trying to live'

    It's my spiritualistic lyrical mystic's guide,
    To the galaxy, with a cynical critic's mind.
    The residual image shines and out lines the last frontier,
    And shows soul to the cold who won't cast one tear.
    In rememberance to those lost to the pestilence,
    lost to the bombs of the false god terrorists.
    Dancing a perilous Waltz with a leading partner,
    To destruction, dysfunction, we see disaster.
    It's a kalidescopic picture, the hypersonic hits'ya,
    Like the Boxing Day Tidal Wave, the microphonic spitter,
    Side steps the spiteful hate, hoping their mind'll change,
    From a violent rage into a quiet escape.
    By the light of day i travel through the valley of darkness,
    Knowing only God can carry me past this.
    I parry the hardest shots, slip and then lock a arm,
    Of the devil so he's captured like Iraq's Saddam.

    'please Lord forgive me for all my sins
    my life is all i have to live
    i can't survive on what they've got to give
    so i'm just trying to live,i'm just trying to live'

    On the blue planet of hatred, truth's damaged and naked,
    By seuth sayer mood shaker using the magic of Satan.
    The tragic is blatent, my spirit ragged and age'ed,
    Breathing in a demons sin and his cancerous agent.
    I spit out lucid staments like hallucinations,
    Remove the rose tint so i can see this abusive nation.
    A new sensation that has to be spoon fed,
    in two steps only then to see to my true depth.
    I move heads with an hypnotic melody,
    this promise slip knots the dishonest enemy.
    I drop heavily steadily like torrential rain,
    Ecstatic oblivion and differential pain,
    In the land where 'i love you's' just a general saying,
    and everyone's out there for their own essential gain.
    My metal remains stainless, my spirit is free,
    For i'm forgiven for my sins by the lyrics i bleed.

    'please Lord forgive me for all my sins
    my life is all i have to live
    i can't survive on what they've got to give
    so i'm just trying to live,i'm just trying to live'








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      i see your delema... God takes the longest of time to answer if he ever does, and he always makes us show our devotion through pain and suffering... hold on child... the dark river is treacherous and hard to cross, but on the other side lies peace and rest...
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by diamonds_2_dust | [ Reply to This ]


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