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    dots Submission Name: Standing on the Brinkdots
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    Author: Cigarz
    ASL Info:    35/M/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 258/183/50
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 196
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 753



    Description:
       Story time, simple and direct. You, yes you... come here and get civilized.


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    dotsStanding on the Brinkdots
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    At the point where two skies have gathered,
    past where my father had furthest walked,
    those who ride the white caps have come
    to make me white.
    To their left, brass stitches
    gouge the beach where they have passed.
    To the right, the smallest of tea cups
    are left behind for the little ones
    to be mesmerized.

    I wish I were on the cliff above the sand,
    where I could watch in wonder
    as they climb ashore.
    To no avail,
    I cannot be hidden
    and must be responsive
    to their bleeding eyes.
    Their cloth, a forest green and golden seal,
    wraps about where I stand defeated.
    My legs are free but my mind is already in
    Europe.




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 11:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Slave Trade. My first and only thought.

    Bloody nicely written Todd, very obtuse and thought-provoking, with a melancholy air that is perfect for the subject matter.

    Excellent work. Nothing I can find to play with here.

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I would say thi is a person who longs to break free from being a person who is refined in manner. His forefathers were gentleman or nobles, no defect in character, so the burden lies on this person to continue on what has been passed down for ions it seem. Nicely worded and it was direct. I thought you did a good job with this one.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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