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    dots Submission Name: lovely dizzy frienddots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/624
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslovely dizzy frienddots
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    she showed me the things noone else had seen
    noone looked for who she wanted to be
    she hesitated, it seemed safe
    then she jumped, and all the pain just fell away

    twisting and turning until she stopped
    twirling and whirling until she dropped
    my dizzy fairy friend fell too hard too young
    such a waste, such a shame, she had such a lovely face

    she was the girl who made the glitter shine
    she told me how to smile
    life is such a turn because everything beautiful dies

    she made life softer, she made love easier
    twiting and turning, she learned but never lived

    twisting and turning until she stopped
    twirling and whirling until she dropped
    my dizzy fairy friend fell too hard too young
    such a waste, such a shame, she had such a lovely face




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