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    dots Submission Name: Truthdots
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    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       Don't get upset. I am not picking on any of these icons. I am picking on the institutions that were formed in their names.


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    Jesus
    Mohammed
    Krishna
    Buddha
    Liars all.

    Blasphemy you say?
    Only to the religious.
    But religions have
    never opened the door
    to Paradise.

    Don't seek these men
    as the religious preach
    or you will surely
    will be led astray.
    But rather, seek
    what they saught.

    For here is where the
    religious loose their way
    and the spiritual
    light the path.

    Religions seek
    the sheep, who follow.
    Spirituality seeks
    the Shepards,who lead.

    There is no Truth,
    only truths.
    And when Truth
    is spoken of
    know that a liar is speaking.




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 17:53:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Jesus
    Mohammed
    Krishna
    Buddha
    Liars all.

    Blasphemy you say?
    Only to the religious.
    But religions have
    never opened the door
    to Paradise.

    Don't seek these men
    as the religious preach
    or you will surely
    will be led astray.
    But rather, seek
    what they [sought].

    For here is where the
    religious loose their way
    and the spiritual
    light the path.

    Religions seek
    the sheep, who follow.
    Spirituality seeks
    the [Shepherds],who lead.

    There is no Truth,
    only truths.
    And when Truth
    is spoken of
    know that a liar is speaking.

    its interesting how you advise the person that there is no truth and yet encourage the the seeking of truths instead.

    philosophically the piece is flawed on many levels. for example; the law of non-contradiction states that there can not be two separate truths for one claim. in other words, both Jesus and Mohammad can not be equally true. both have very different ideas.

    also, you make no distinction of a person to follow but what they themselves followed. well, they followed and lead completely different lives. Buddha was a Hindu that found fault in the belief system that pain and suffering are but illusions. for that he gave up everything (he was very wealthy) to fnd the meaning of life. Jesus (the one true God ;) die on a cross for His enemies. are you willing to do that? my guess is not.

    what i suggest is, go back and fix the spelling errors and get a proper argument down and then make you spiel. because all that is here is a rant that offers no insight...just plain bigoted angst.

    i hope that you dont find me unkind. this is just how i leave critiques. i read for pleasure and understanding, not to make religious battles. however, your piece is flawed on many levels and as eliteskills says, "let a proper critique.

    i think that you have writing ability, but that you just need to think your claims out further.

    -john-paul
    | Posted on 2010-07-09 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      Very daring of u to post this here. Im asuming this is why u dont have too many fans of this particular poem, but I applaud ur boldness. In fact, I agree with ur views.

    "There is no Truth,
    only truths.
    And when Truth
    is spoken of
    know that a liar is speaking." - I love that line, its so powerful and a great way to end the poem. It leaves ur mind boggling. Great work!



    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Amanda_d19 | [ Reply to This ]
      thats really philosophical...the first line catches you off gaurd then u get pulled in. i really like it. its mind-blowing. I really like this
    "Don't seek these men
    as the religious preach
    or you will surely
    will be led astray.
    But rather, seek
    what they saught."
    it reminds me of the teachings of plato and aristotle and the whole lot. its interesting.
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by emb_er77 | [ Reply to This ]


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