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Love (verse two)

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 172
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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this one wasn't as good as the first verse but tell me what you think

Love (verse two)

((verse two))
I love ya so much i can neva understand
how i fucked up so bad i can neva understand
how i mistreated a king a man
cheated more than once but he still forgave me
everyone else against us i played me
'could've had his baby
but now i'm stuck wit maybe
almost comes close but never counts
no love could ever amount
to the love he gave
my heart could cave
i did a good man wront
thats my destruction
first man that ever understood my production
understood my art
everything that made me
these feelings i gotta let 'em be
i had to let ya'll see wat could be my ressurection
let this be the end of my confession

Love is so blind
shouldn't have cheated
didn't believe that you would leave
I shouldn've learned to let pain go
now i know
what it's like to be alone
just know i miss you baby
i miss you...

Submitted on 2006-04-24 20:10:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  'could've had his baby
but now i'm stuck wit maybe

those lines are really good but the meaning behind them kinda sux...for u. this one was a lot shorter than the first one. i was expecting more. i liked the last two lines too. the way u rapped it up was pretty good. keep it up
| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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