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Me Freestyling pt 1

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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lalala this is something random i wrote in my ghetto yearbook (for those who have never been broke a ghetto yearbook is a notebook binder or peices of paper you stapple toghter and get ppl to sign lol.) anyways tell me what u think. Btw it's under passion'll get it.

Me Freestyling pt 1

could it be true that everyone dies
or do we sleep for eterenity
we may grow so fast
but it takes time for maturity
I was young and naive to think about life
to think that at that age
i could be ya wife
not ya wife but ya girl
i'd give up the world
just to have another kiss
from my lips to your lips
my body and your body joined as one
like how u loved me through words
under the moon and the sun
because of u i don't rap no more i simply preach hiphop
'cause i learned that wit my sould
the beat don't stop
so i'll write till my soul releases
then i might tell my life story
in little bits and pieces

Submitted on 2006-04-24 20:16:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is one of ur better freestyles. probably cuz u actually had a concrete subject to write about. u know u can afford a spiral notebook. i don't know why ur writing on some stapled paper. good job babe
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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