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    dots Submission Name: Dying and Cryingdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    I'm falling,slowly falling,
    ANd I don't know what to do.
    I'm dying and crying,
    And wanting to be with you.

    I'm slipping,reaching out,
    For you to take my hand.
    I'm crying my heart out,
    Because I don't understand.

    I'm losing it quietly,
    Dangerously going out of my head.
    You hurt me so bad,
    And I want to be dead.

    I'm running,tripping,
    Watching my blood fall.
    My body is scarred.
    Thoughts are breaking through my wall.

    I'm shouting,screaming,
    Nedding you to hear me.
    I'm making it slowly,
    But still wishing we could be.

    I'm torn apart, I can't make it,
    Your the on I truly love.
    I found you, you lost us.
    Together we were suppose to go above.

    I'm sinking,letting go,
    I can't live without you.
    You never wanted me
    And now we are through.

    And I'm bleeding,I'm crying,
    For the last time.
    Your supposed to be here.
    Guess you were never mine.

    Yes, I'm falling,slowly falling,
    And I don't know what to do.
    I'm dying and crying,
    Because I want to be with you...




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 21:08:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Holy moly thats good writting sounds preatty cool and devoted I love it, ty
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one it is just not enough emotion in it. But i can't really be harsh because some of my poems are like that. I still like it alot. Keep writing and don't ever give up. I love you. What the hell I F.L.Y!!

    luv alway'z

    kelsey ( annoying one )LOL!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-25 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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