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    dots Submission Name: My Scarsdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 697
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMy Scarsdots
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    My scars are too deep to ever heal.
    With pain that I refuse to reveal.
    All my life left alone in the dark.
    My scars leave the deepest mark.

    My scars still haunt me in the night.
    Lost in the dark without any light.
    And this life is too much of a fee.
    My scars left me too blinded to see.

    My scars are too much to bare.
    Back and fourth, here and there.
    The razor digs hard into my skin.
    My scars are proof of human sin.

    My scars have a story to be told.
    Those little secrets of mine unfold.
    Memories awaken from the past.
    My scars are bloody, bleeding fast.

    My scars are a replacement for tears.
    Feelings I've kept for many years.
    That show I am not here anymore.
    My scars leave me lying on the floor.

    My scars help me,screaming inside.
    The burning pain I cannot hide.
    Cuts and bruises do make it worse.
    My scars are proof I am cursed.

    My scars are the anger in my face.
    Feeling nothing but empty space.
    The pain takes over without a word.
    My scars are screams that are unheard.

    My scars portray a burning pain.
    A silent walk down memory lane.
    Where I can feel all the blood shed.
    My scars are proof I should be dead.





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      Sound like you need an hug if you were by me Id give you an hug spinn your around till your happy, your scares Im sure tell an story why be that way you dont want to be like everybody else depressed, you should be different special
    your poem is good everybody has there own problems I do Im not perfect I run from the past im sure you dont, Anyways thought id drop an few lines for you hope you feel happy and may you feel the joy and happiness, big smiles ty
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow, I am amazed to find this without comments. Very deep into what it means to be one that cuts themselves. People find it hard to understand why others do this, and you have given the world a perfect definition and reason. Very well written. The redundancy of the two words.. My Scars suits the flow and doesn't make it sound bad at all. I love how you can express this so wonderfully.

    I would point out which stanzas and lines I like the most, but I have nearly written a book for you thus far. Teehee. I believe this is my favorite write of yours. Very full of emotion and imagery so delightful. Don't let anyone tell you that you aren't good at this, for it wouldn't be true.

    I have to add this one to my faves, keep up the awesome work! I am so thrilled to have read this, and I am just sorry I didn't find it sooner.

    With much admiration,
    Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]


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