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    dots Submission Name: Regretting Suicidedots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 712
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       A sad poem about a girl that committed suicide and regrets it while she is dying...comments would be nice.


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    dotsRegretting Suicidedots
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    Torn and helpless
    Left to cry
    A fragile body
    Left to die.

    Confided within
    A silver blade
    Cutting away
    To make her life fade

    Bleeding through
    Her pretty clothes
    Her life's a mess
    But no one knows

    Watch her life
    Just fall apart
    All because of
    A broken heart.

    Watch her give up
    As she takes out her blade
    And adds to the cuts
    She's already made.

    One last cut
    Is all it takes
    To erase the past
    And erase her mistakes.

    As her weak body falls
    And her tattered wrists bleed
    She wishes her suicide
    Doesn't succeed.

    For the pain she's feeling
    From the amount of regret
    Surpasses such pain
    That she'll never forget.

    As she lies dying
    She sheds her last tear
    For she never really wanted
    To end it all here.

    She committed suicide
    Not wanting to end her life.
    But sometimes that happens
    When your addicted to the knife...






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