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    dots Submission Name: I Miss You So...dots
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    Author: In the Fire...
    ASL Info:    30/m/Orlando
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 46/121/63
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI Miss You So...dots
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    There are no words to place this void,
    or how I struggle to avoid
    the thought of you, though you were dear.
    I fight myself to stop the tears.
    No matter what, you were there.
    No matter what, you always cared.
    It's been so long, but still I cry.
    Oh! If you knew how hard I've tried
    to rid myself of endless thoughts,
    but I cannot, true joy you brought.
    I can't believe you left me so.
    This world is cruel, you aught to know.
    How I long for your hug.
    How I long to feel your love.
    To hear your voice over the phone.
    To feel you there when I feel alone.
    To right my wrongs, to yes my no's.
    To hold me high when I feel low.
    I feel you left my side too fast,
    the world around me shook, then crashed.
    I saw you struggle and fade away.
    I saw you wither day by day.
    Oh! If you knew how it hurt me so
    to see your pain, to see you go,
    to see your pride brought down to shame.
    It hurt so much when you forgot my name.
    I was your baby to the end.
    I can't forget, I can't pretend.
    Mom, I love you, and if your were here,
    I'd hold you tight and keep you near.
    I miss you...




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      This is beautiful. It's hard losing someone you love so much. It seems like the most beautiful poems or stories come from such ugly times. Not that you wouldnt trade all the poems in the world to have her back, but this really is beautiful. I'm glad you can get some of the feeling out. I can't imagine how hard it would be, but stay strong. I agree witih raivn..very sad and terribly moving.....
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely...there are no words to express the loss of a loved one. I haven't yet lost anyone as close to me as this...but my cousin lost a grandmother back last summer. She had both lung cancer and Alzheimers, and this reminds me of Jessie's pain as her grandmother that had been there her entire life slowly forgot who she was. This is very sad and terribly moving. You did a fantastic job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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