hm..I really liked this one..confusing I think though..yet i'm tired and lost today..the flow was ok..but you used "burning" twice..i dunno that just threw me off..
"When the sands of time fall each grain shall peirce the heart of his fate"
I thought this was the best line..very unique..and easy to follow..that we have no control over our fate and future..yet wet try so hard to take control of what we cannot..sucks but you can't take control of, your scared of it..anywho lovely piece..confusing..but i'm sure you the writer gets it..keep up the good work!!
Maybe it is just me, or the earlyness this morning.. but I really found this one hard to follow. I do like it, something seems out of place though.
That being said, I did like this part in particular:
"With what strenghth could he use, as the final wind blows. When will his strength fail When will he fall to the ash's of this burning world.
When the sands of time fall each grain shall peirce the heart of his fate."
What this is saying to me is that no matter how hard we try, no matter how much we struggle, we cannot overcome that which we cannot control.. Time, fate, death. In the end all the hardship and struggling is essentially futile, isn't it?
Alltogether a good write, i'll try reading it again a bit later and see if my perception changes any.
Laz This write is very intersting I like the way you put this together I strongly believe his strength will only take him as far as his mind and Heart allow him to go The Heart is the center of the human Body and also the center of the soul Remember even as powerful as the mind is it still needs the Heart to continually pump blood to the brain in order to survive God Bless Ron
And in 5 more days you will be A Married man Congratulations I sure wish I could have been at the bachelor party (LOL) Take Care Ron