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    dots Submission Name: Tears of Mascaradots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 936
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    Description:
       a poem about putting up a mask...comments would be nice..


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    dotsTears of Mascaradots
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    I dare you to look
    Straight into my eyes.
    ANd open your ears
    While listening to my cries.

    Every day I wake up
    The first thing I feel is pain.
    Then I walk outside,
    It's always pouring rain.

    Most people do not see
    Some even think it's wrong.
    To take a look,stop,and try,
    To help someone move on.

    You think I'm always happy?
    You think I'm fine?
    It's just an act I put on.
    As if this life weren't mine.

    Though I am laughing during the day
    I come home in fright.
    I go straight to my room
    And cry the rest of the night.

    I could sit and tell my stories,
    Of why I feel this way.
    But there is no point either.
    Cause they wouldn't stay anyway.

    Most get up and leave me.
    When they hear about my pain.
    Ignored, as if these tears of mascara,
    Were caused by the rain.

    So I'm going to keep pretending,
    Like I have been all these years.
    But if you look closely,
    You might just see my tears...




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 21:42:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the way you showed how you are feeling. Your words touched me very deeply. One part though could be changed.
    "When I walk outside"
    Other than that I see nothing else wrong with it. Great poem.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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