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    Author: In the Fire...
    ASL Info:    30/m/Orlando
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 46/121/63
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Sitting here with nothing to do
    but close my eyes and think of you.
    Your smile was bright and your eyes would shine,
    i'd forever be proud to call you mine.
    But now all i see is a cloud of gray.

    I wish you were here like yesterday.

    - Susan Hall




    Submitted on 2006-04-24 21:49:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww that's sad.
    It's amazing what you can say in only a few lines.
    I don't know who Susan Hall is, but she seems very wise.
    I love it.

    Ooo thank you for the comment and favorites add, by the way.
    It is very much appreciated.

    Have a great weekend, and Happy (almost) Arbor Day!! lol

    Byee

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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