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    Author: liamzamudio
    ASL Info:    15/m/Cardiff
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 7/17/15
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1436
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    Bytes: 276



    Description:
       I wrote this when my best friend's ex boyfriend was causing her all kinds of problems.


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    Leave her alone and just fight me
    Fight me till we cant stand, cant see,
    Just leave my baby be
    She cant stand the pain you bring
    With your hate, your malice, your everything,
    I cant stand to see her cry,
    See her hurt?… I’d rather die




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 08:28:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the words of this poem are few but are big on thier meaning. i would not change anything on this one and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by manymoodsofme | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is very direct. it has the potential to be cliché, but it is relatable (at least for me) which helps avoid that. nice work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Edith Dana | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem, is short and sweet. and written with such love. It really brings in personal feelings when I read it. I definately love this poem and I think it was very well written.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Cari Elise323 | [ Reply to This ]


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