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    dots Submission Name: Change of Tidedots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChange of Tidedots
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    When I climb the mountain
    I decide that today I'll be dieng.
    When at the top, my conscience hits me and
    tells me that its a heinous crime I'll be committing.

    I know I might not have as much sorrows
    As most of you reading what I write.
    Being blamed for something I never thought I'd cause
    Is when I wish I could give up this fight.

    You, my friend, think I don't uderstand
    The intesity of the damage I've caused.
    You're wrong and you make me feel
    Like I'm a friend you've already lost!

    It's like I was standing on top of the cliff-
    And a dreaded wind pushed me over it.
    I've meant all my sorries but if you don't understand-it's time and I'll be gone in a bit.

    I remember that you had misunderstood me
    For something frank I had said...
    You had hurt me then but what i did recently
    Was a mistake, and not a plan of vengeance that i had made!

    It seemed to me that you had trusted me enough. And had taken me close!
    I forgave you everytime you unrealisingly hurt me but...To not forgive is I guess what you already chose!

    You are probably thinking that things among us can never be the same again.
    It depends on what you choose...
    And i chose to not apologise ever agian!




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 10:07:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow wahtever it was youdid couldnt have been that bad we are all human and make mistakes and if your friend dont know that than they werent a true friend.
    Tammy
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by homie1065 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, man, what happened was probably not your fault. No need to even THINK about jumping off cliffs and crap like that! Like I always say- DON'T DO ANYTHING STUPID! If I was in his shoes, I would have tried to work it out for the best both ways, not just desert a friend and lose the girl at the same time, lol.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]


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