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    dots Submission Name: Painful Realitydots

    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsPainful Realitydots

    They hang around with me
    -Giving me most of their time
    Making promises and breaking them
    -They are friends of mine.

    Their tears- I soak them dry!
    They're in oblivion when I cry!
    I forgive them even when they don't
    They do me injustice and when caught they
    cover it up with lies!

    When they are the object of attention
    I congratulate them and fight with jealosy.
    If it's me on the spotlight-
    They desert me and practice hypocrisy!

    They prove to be traitors-
    They always betray.
    One mistake I commit-
    I'm a wrongdoer they say!

    When I count the number of true friends I have.They are not on the list: ther's just YOU!
    I stumble at every step and you catch me
    It's me that you never eschew.

    When my sorrows fill me up to my brim-
    I smoke, I drink- my tears I hide!
    You show up with your heart of sorrows
    And you let our griefs coincide.

    Nobody knows me like you do: you are my only
    I shall be there for you like you've been there for me till-
    THE END!

    Submitted on 2006-04-25 10:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This poem reminds me of my friend and how I have been so true to him. He is so oblivious tho.

    I like the way the poem is put together. Unique in it's own way. Very cool. I like the consept and general theme...


    | Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      very well written. cherish the friend you have cuz they are hard to find. YOu sound like you are a true friend too and someday they will really need you and you wont be there and they will know who was a friend and wish things were different. Keep writting.

    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by homie1065 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, some good friend you have. He's always there for you, even if he can't do everything for you, which I bet he wishes he could! Lovely poem, simply realistic, painfully real.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
      You can really get the feeling of freindship across keep writing i would like to read some more.
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Laz | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved the originality. Friends are def. hard to come by, but looks like you found a good one. Nothing I would change. Actually, wait, in the second stanza you spelled apologize with an "s". Other than that nice work.

    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by bmc | [ Reply to This ]

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