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Painful Reality

Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148 /93 /34
Words: 261
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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Painful Reality

They hang around with me
-Giving me most of their time
Making promises and breaking them
-They are friends of mine.

Their tears- I soak them dry!
They're in oblivion when I cry!
I forgive them even when they don't
They do me injustice and when caught they
cover it up with lies!

When they are the object of attention
I congratulate them and fight with jealosy.
If it's me on the spotlight-
They desert me and practice hypocrisy!

They prove to be traitors-
They always betray.
One mistake I commit-
I'm a wrongdoer they say!

When I count the number of true friends I have.They are not on the list: ther's just YOU!
I stumble at every step and you catch me
It's me that you never eschew.

When my sorrows fill me up to my brim-
I smoke, I drink- my tears I hide!
You show up with your heart of sorrows
And you let our griefs coincide.

Nobody knows me like you do: you are my only
I shall be there for you like you've been there for me till-

Submitted on 2006-04-25 10:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. This poem reminds me of my friend and how I have been so true to him. He is so oblivious tho.

I like the way the poem is put together. Unique in it's own way. Very cool. I like the consept and general theme...


| Posted on 2006-12-12 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
  very well written. cherish the friend you have cuz they are hard to find. YOu sound like you are a true friend too and someday they will really need you and you wont be there and they will know who was a friend and wish things were different. Keep writting.

| Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by homie1065 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, some good friend you have. He's always there for you, even if he can't do everything for you, which I bet he wishes he could! Lovely poem, simply realistic, painfully real.
| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
  You can really get the feeling of freindship across keep writing i would like to read some more.
| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Laz | [ Reply to This ]
  Loved the originality. Friends are def. hard to come by, but looks like you found a good one. Nothing I would change. Actually, wait, in the second stanza you spelled apologize with an "s". Other than that nice work.

| Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by bmc | [ Reply to This ]

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