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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    You look in my eyes as your about to hurl an iron at me, you see you, a pregnant 11th grade girl.

    You see the product of you and daddy, and everything i do is wrong so now you beat me.

    You pull my hair, make me cry. Tell me you could have had an abortion, tell me i could have died.

    You hit me, you yell and scream. And every night i pray that this could be a dream.

    I wish that i'll wake up and you wouldn't hit me. I wish that i'll wake up, but this could never be.

    Submitted on 2006-04-25 11:16:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think it's gr8 i love it hit's deep cause that kind of thing does happen
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by brokenfairy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I am speechless. I hope none of this is true in your case. If so, I hope you seek help and recieve ASAP. As for a poem this was more of a vent. I think it is very good you wrote out your feelings. In addtition to writing, seek professional help for youself.

    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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