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    dots Submission Name: Cameradots
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    Author: Glassy Eyed
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 550/427/187
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This was an assignment for poetry class, call a found poem I think...


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    dotsCameradots
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    The basic
    Function
    of a camera
    is to
    Record
    a PERMANENT image
    on a piece of
    Film.
    From the
    NEGATIVE
    a
    POSITIVE
    image, or print,
    can be made.
    ALL
    still cameras
    are designed to do
    One Thing;
    To capture
    1 single instant
    in
    Time
    and
    Space
    on film.




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 11:43:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think I understand what you were attempting here. the short, shallow breathed sentences are supposed to represent the capture of the sentence as it unfolds. Like a camera, a still frame of the sentence as it all pulls itself together. Very Very cool. P.S. I had to read it twice to get it.

    -jarrett
    | Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by awasteoftime | [ Reply to This ]
      it has potential. it seems slightly enveloped and lacking colorization. a few words here or there, and a more innovative prosterior and I think you'll have something.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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