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    dots Submission Name: F U Ck it alldots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 1066
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    Bytes: 488



    Description:
       pissed and confused


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    dotsF U Ck it alldots
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    She tears he hair out and falls apart
    If there is a God why won't he help her
    she see's around her, her mother dying
    he sister crying from a broken heart
    and she tries to believe
    that in the end there is something worth it all
    but for now
    she hates
    she hates passionately and she screams
    because this is out of her contol
    because she can't give life to her mother
    or heal her sisters broken heart




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 13:29:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hows things per discription pissed and confused
    your post once again is very powerful some of lifes extremes can do that to you one you are young they only get harder as you age such as watching one of your siblings die before you do
    great write and enjoyable read
    hope all is well or gets better

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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