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    dots Submission Name: Angel Teardropsdots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsAngel Teardropsdots
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    My guardian angel, once careless and free,
    flew into the clouds and lost touch with me.
    Her tears were cold and wet, falling on my face.
    Her smile had left us without a trace.

    Her angelic lips quivered, frozen and scared,
    I felt rain clouds visiting, and had to prepare.
    I knew that angels, often content,
    were very special presents that God had sent.

    To see one so sad,
    so afraid,
    so alone,
    had made me weep while the cold winds had blown.

    Her wings lost feathers,
    comforting and soft,
    falling from the stars,
    floating aloft.

    Her pain was felt throughout the land,
    to feel true misery is impossible to stand.
    I prayed so that when her hurting stops,
    I'll be able to taste the angel's teardrops.




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 13:37:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is differnet, but a good different. I liked the way it flowed. Made it easier on the reader. Also, the way you make it seem like the angel is unhappy is my favorite because everyone seems to think that Angel's are. Nice job!

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      An interesting look on things, keep up the good work ^_^
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Necromi | [ Reply to This ]


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