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    dots Submission Name: Ghostly Emotionsdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1012
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1777



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    dotsGhostly Emotionsdots
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    Verse 1
    you look at me ever so sneaky
    with your ghost eyes
    your eyes are barely seeing
    see me in the corner of your eye
    you want to stop
    but yet you still go

    Pre-Chorus
    lost in this mistry fog
    haunted by your ghostly emotions
    they can't always been seen
    but you know they're there

    Chorus
    baby you're just trying to hide your love
    but i can see it in your eyes
    actions speak louder than words
    and the screaming in your hearts be heard

    Verse 2
    you touch me ever so gently
    with your ghost hands
    your touch i'm hardly feeling
    as you run you hand along my back
    you tell me stop
    but you let me go

    Pre-Chorus
    &
    Chorus


    Verse 3
    you kiss me ever so softly
    with your ghost lips
    our lips are barely touching
    but still i feel the love in your soul
    you mind says stop
    but you heart shouts go

    Pre-Chorus
    &
    Chorus


    Coda
    you mind says stop
    but your heart shouts go
    lost in this misty fog
    haunted by your ghostly emotions
    actions speak louder than words
    and the screaming in your heart's been heard





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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this one. there are some typos but i'll let that slide. j/k

    theseare one of the first lyrics ive read on here that i like. im picky like that. it just shoves the image of someone singing this.

    great job
    chilz
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good
    It is certainly good to see you posting again
    You do have a talent with song lyrics
    I missed not seeing your name
    How are you doing?
    Well if you get a chance keep in touch
    Great Job with this one
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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