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    dots Submission Name: Family Treedots

    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFamily Treedots

    If I were walking in the woods
    and came upon my family tree.
    I might fall asleep on it's trunk,
    to drift away in history.
    Through the roots my soul would fly,
    just like an eagle soaring free.
    Seeing my ancestors faces
    Down the countless centuries.

    I'd wake to the smell of lilacs
    and of a honey-suckle blend.
    Bringing my distant reverie
    to an abrubt, but pleasant end.
    Then I'd hug the ancient tree trunk
    like one would hug a long lost friend.
    Breaking loose I'd spy some branches.
    Hand over hand, I'd start to ascend.

    Climbing up to the highes limbs
    I'd find a place to rest and see
    all the limbs were sick and twisted,
    brown leaves where green should be.
    Searching for a healthy blossom.
    Clutching it tight with childish glee,
    I'd lower myself to the ground
    and go plant my own family tree.

    Submitted on 2006-04-25 20:18:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely love, love, love this poem. I must say...u did an excellent job with this one. I love the flow to it and I love the way u paint a picture in my mind with ur words. Excellent work, my friend.
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Amanda_d19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa, very good. The comparisons were amazing, and even the subject is original. It's a topic that many people overlook, so good job on choosing it. The rhyme was good too, it didn't seem forced.

    It reminded me a lot of my own family, how I love them so much even though they're not perfect. I really can't think of any suggestions to make. I think this poem is great just the way you wrote it.
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Amissa | [ Reply to This ]

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