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    dots Submission Name: freestyledots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 852
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    Bytes: 550



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       I been trying to start freestylin and this is the only shit i've came up with remotely good enough to be posted


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    the kings blast out your asophogis/
    with lyrical bullets, no match for this/
    this wicked, and sadistic/
    superb, yo' but you missed it/
    feelin' up your bitch, and then she kissed it/
    don't get it twisted/
    man, I will rip shit/
    but I'ma have some fun, its your expenses/
    check this out, can I get in/
    up, up in your girl with twin/
    don't fuck with me, I do it again and again/
    don't let your girl fool you, she done been with plenty men/




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 22:53:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is ok for a freestyle. i can't freestyle to save my life. like i can make flows in my head on the spot but when it comes to spitting off the top of the dome i'm a hopeless cause
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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