Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: freestyledots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 793
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 550



    Description:
       I been trying to start freestylin and this is the only shit i've came up with remotely good enough to be posted


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsfreestyledots
    -------------------------------------------


    the kings blast out your asophogis/
    with lyrical bullets, no match for this/
    this wicked, and sadistic/
    superb, yo' but you missed it/
    feelin' up your bitch, and then she kissed it/
    don't get it twisted/
    man, I will rip shit/
    but I'ma have some fun, its your expenses/
    check this out, can I get in/
    up, up in your girl with twin/
    don't fuck with me, I do it again and again/
    don't let your girl fool you, she done been with plenty men/




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 22:53:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      this is ok for a freestyle. i can't freestyle to save my life. like i can make flows in my head on the spot but when it comes to spitting off the top of the dome i'm a hopeless cause
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    100549

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    untitled written by Outlaw
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry