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    dots Submission Name: Wrestling With Wordsdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1423
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 163



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       Sometimes love does that to you.


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    dotsWrestling With Wordsdots
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    Her mind is frayed, confused
    frazzled, dizzy and has blown a fuse.
    She needs a new word for beautiful,
    but all she can write is… you.




    Submitted on 2006-04-25 23:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awwwwe.
    its beautiful!
    i love how its just
    so short with words
    but the meaning is so strong!

    x x x Mandi
    | Posted on 2006-05-27 00:00:00 | by Is this love? | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, woow... only four lines, and holding that much powerful emotion. This is so sweet, and beauitufl, and wow!! Aww... I love how it's so short, and to the point, but I love the last line, and aww.... sweet!!
    Peace, music, and much love,
    Aya
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      Blown fuses are just a wonderful thing as long as they don't last too long. We do have to go with reality at times, but only when necessary.

    Beautiful is a word that means many things to me. A countenance,
    intelligence, presence, calm awareness, and that "yes, there is someone at home factor" that makes one notice. Notice the physical is not by beauty alone, there is much more, when one sees
    beauty from the inside out.

    Very sweet write Chrys, my voltage meter is humming..simply
    because it hits home, thanks for sharing,

    Nan

    P.S. Ohhhmmmm!
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem really expresses how I feel about a certain someone I met awhile back. not that anything could ever come of it and I was intrigued by another not long ago, but beautiful is what I thought this one man was. and I don't think that too often. I also felt he was like all the men I had ever known. weird. but still, not the one I guess. if there is such a thing! very nicely done. you wrote the thoughts of many a woman in love.
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Chrys, if you are going to write a small poem, it needs to tell a big story, and have a big impact, imeediately, and with no fuss.

    You suceeded here, very very good indeed.

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-04-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and complex. But the meaning is not elusive. I loved the wording used here. It was just wonderful. Sometimes that one person can control out thoughts just that much. This is a fav.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfectly expressed. This says a thousand things to me all at once. And I love the assonant end-rhymes you use... they're soothing in tone yet they give off a confused sound at the same time... if that makes sense.

    Well... I really don't know what else to say... except that it's beautifully written and it connects with me deeply.

    There are layers to this, simple yet profound, and it's written with such brevity that makes this all so stunningly... right.

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Love can make us feel all these things.
    There are moments that I've experienced this feeling you mention. You just want that one special word to describe it yet it always comes back around to "you".

    I like the adjectives you chose.

    This almost sounds as if it's part of a bigger picture. But in all reality, most poems are, whether long or short.

    I enjoyed.
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very simple and sweet poem. Very well written as you have captured this feeling so very well in a minimalistic way. This feeling you describe is a wonderful one. This poem is solid all on its own but you could even think about adding to this and making this part the final stanza. There is so much more that could be said here yet this is also very good as is. This speaks of love at its finest. The infatuation with the happiness this person brings to your life. Ahhh, such a good feeling indeed. I like this. Very nice poem. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is sweet. I've been there, and I know a lot of people have too. I like the minimalism of this, and the near rhyme is interesting. I'm not sure you need the ellipsis in the last line, but that is up to you. I hope all is well, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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