Oh, woow... only four lines, and holding that much powerful emotion. This is so sweet, and beauitufl, and wow!! Aww... I love how it's so short, and to the point, but I love the last line, and aww.... sweet!! Peace, music, and much love, Aya
Blown fuses are just a wonderful thing as long as they don't last too long. We do have to go with reality at times, but only when necessary.
Beautiful is a word that means many things to me. A countenance, intelligence, presence, calm awareness, and that "yes, there is someone at home factor" that makes one notice. Notice the physical is not by beauty alone, there is much more, when one sees beauty from the inside out.
Very sweet write Chrys, my voltage meter is humming..simply because it hits home, thanks for sharing,
this poem really expresses how I feel about a certain someone I met awhile back. not that anything could ever come of it and I was intrigued by another not long ago, but beautiful is what I thought this one man was. and I don't think that too often. I also felt he was like all the men I had ever known. weird. but still, not the one I guess. if there is such a thing! very nicely done. you wrote the thoughts of many a woman in love.
Perfectly expressed. This says a thousand things to me all at once. And I love the assonant end-rhymes you use... they're soothing in tone yet they give off a confused sound at the same time... if that makes sense.
Well... I really don't know what else to say... except that it's beautifully written and it connects with me deeply.
There are layers to this, simple yet profound, and it's written with such brevity that makes this all so stunningly... right.
This is a very simple and sweet poem. Very well written as you have captured this feeling so very well in a minimalistic way. This feeling you describe is a wonderful one. This poem is solid all on its own but you could even think about adding to this and making this part the final stanza. There is so much more that could be said here yet this is also very good as is. This speaks of love at its finest. The infatuation with the happiness this person brings to your life. Ahhh, such a good feeling indeed. I like this. Very nice poem. Take care.
Aw, this is sweet. I've been there, and I know a lot of people have too. I like the minimalism of this, and the near rhyme is interesting. I'm not sure you need the ellipsis in the last line, but that is up to you. I hope all is well, Amy