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Promise to remember


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 178
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
Total Views: 1023
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:


for someone, when we get to that stage in the relationship, i am gonna give it to em


Promise to remember



Looking in your eyes
Everything else fades
Reality slips
From my hands grip

For that moment in time
When we’re standing
Face to face
And your lips touch mine

I know I’ll never have to feel alone
As long as I’m in your arms
No one can hurt me
Nothing is going to go wrong

When everyone goes home
I sit and remember the first kiss
And hope they’ll never be a last,
Because no one gets me like you do-

Just promise me this
Never let go
Unless you have to
I’ll understand if you do I swear

And remember this for me
No matter how far
Or how wide oceans spread
I’ll still love you

So if one day
You happen to let me slip
You’ll be in my heart
And mind always

Because
Love is the fire
That burns on the wood
Of friendship

Promise to remember
Remember to promise,
For this is my leap of faith
Giving you my heart, trusting you won’t break it




Submitted on 2006-04-26 04:23:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it was a great poem and i really good way of showing that will always be there i reallly connected to it becasue i am at the stage in a relationship and it is the most amazing feeling a believe that you portrayed that well epseciall the fact that you made it seem like a promise. Great Work!
| Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Shark06 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is very sweet...a little simple, but sweet. i dont like though how you've told them to promise to never let go, then turn around and say unless they have to...if it's true love, it's worth fighting for...it just came across to me as you were just rolling over type deal.

And hope they’ll never be a last,
Because no one gets me like you do-

i believe that They'll is suppose to be There'll...though in my opinion i think if the line was I Hope It's Strong Enough To Last

anyway other than that, again, very sweet
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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