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When I say bye to you-


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 162
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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For my parents, cuz i am a boarder, and they go away and live in saudi arabia, where they could die any day... so they left today so i wrote it today. Missing them already.. there isnt a sad so yes depressed


When I say bye to you-



When I say bye to you
It’s like saying good-bye
To the good times
Saying bye to smiling almost

Because when I say bye
I might not get another chance
This might just be the last time
I’ll ever see you again

And it’s a wonder I cry
With that on my mind,
Watching you walk away
Knowing it might be the last

And you never think
About these kinds of things when you’re young
It’s like a hug and a kiss
And you’ll be back someday

I praise God every night
To keep you safe,
For the alternative
I fear is unbearable

And people say
Hush, you’ll see them soon
But that’s the thing
What if I don’t

If I don’t,
And I heard the worst,
There wouldn’t be a day
I didn’t think about you

I can’t promise
I won’t cry,
But I do promise I’ll be strong,
Like you told me too




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  I would just like to start this by saying that I am in awe at your general maturity and poise, I'm nearly twenty and am probibly not as half as mature as you...that being said I would have to say the part that struck a chord in my heart was when you said "I promice to be strong, like you told me to" it made me feel as if this person that you missed is a wise and carring individual, that even though you are sad at the loss of this person that they do not want to burden your everyday life and that you wont let it burn your insides up because you love them and will obey thier request. Other than that I mainly Identify with having to leave someone not knowing if you will ever see them again, you have done an extremely well job of putting those feelings into words you have my respect
-TheGentlemanWhore
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]
  omg, that is so good. I didn't get what you were talking about at first, i thought you were talking about someone who went to Iraq or something, that would piss me off, because i hate that stupid war. But anyways, that was really good. I thought id read your poem and leave you a comment, seeing as no one else did. ok, well, im done.

~*~katara~*~
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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