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    dots Submission Name: The Art of Erasingdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Art of Erasingdots

    What you leave out
    is as important as what you say.
    The erased words remain implied.
    They took balance
    from your words,
    and after pruning,
    your word sculpture
    is no longer crooked.

    Submitted on 2004-05-08 17:21:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thin that this poem is great and was surprised it made a lot of since and i think it said everything eventhough it is so short nicly done
    | Posted on 2004-05-16 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      This might be an egotistical leap, but I feel like you had me in your mind at least partially when you wrote this.
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      idefinetly get what you mean, and i totally agree with "black rock tractor" when he says he felt partially in your mind when you wrote this.*thumbs up*
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very interesting, dumplin. i've recently found some old writings that i've been "pruning." sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. i like the idea of the words as branches on a tree and pruning them for a better effect, as it were. nice unique write!
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like to leave things out and just tell them inbetween the lines. so I totally agree with you. the image of 'a word sculpture' is great. good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      After pruning your word sculpture... I know you don't like to use punctuation, but there should be a comma between pruning and your.... to clarify. I couldn't understand the last line until I realized the punctuation was off.
    But other than that very good! That's why I like to handwrite things - you can still see what you erased. Computers it's like BLIP and it's gone. Love the word sulpture *imagines a topiary in the shape of the word 'WORD'* tee hee rating: great job, special: tee hee ~Cora Windova
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Would not us all aspire to have this poem written of them! Place this in huge letters right under the home page by Elite Skills.
    As always your massage in such few words, speaks volumns
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      It not the largest poem, yet it doesn't need to be. The words deliver a heck of a punch. Nice Home Run...
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      cute poem. i liked the implications. i think my old english teacher in high school would be delighted by this write.
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This rings so true. The biggest problem and wouldn't it be so nice if people you speak with would know what it is you imply. The world may be better off for it.
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it may be more aptly stated to say "They took imbalance from the words."....If it took balance than it would be crooked rather than being "no longer crooked." Do you see what I am trying to say? I am confusing myself....

    It is true that what we do not say is also important....reading between the lines.
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, darn it. I read your work again and now it makes greater sense. I apologize for the balance/imbalance debacle.
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]

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