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    dots Submission Name: The vampiredots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1223
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe vampiredots
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    The sun,
    its in my eyes,
    burning me from the inside out.

    The sun
    is in my heart,
    but it does not purify my black soul;
    it can't quench my blood lust,
    its to late....
    for this vampire.

    The night,
    watches over me,
    like a mother to a child,
    the moon,
    tis my calling,
    upon the witches hour.

    I lay awake,
    upon my bed,
    i stare,
    in to space,
    somewhere,
    above my head.

    Can't you hear me,
    silantly,
    screaming in to the night,
    this pain;
    is all too much,
    i can't take this,
    for a moment longer,
    and i wont.

    The sun,
    it creaps,
    upon my skin,
    searing the flesh,
    in the light,
    soon i will be,
    entirly gone,
    a shadow in the night.




    Submitted on 2006-04-26 11:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its cool i like it.
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Sorry but its good except when I read this its like you chopped the poem up to make it look longer besides that and three misspelled words its a good read

    oh here:
    silently,
    creeps,
    entirely.

    -darkeveris
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by darkeveris | [ Reply to This ]


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