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    dots Submission Name: Passeddots

    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       just something I slapped together just now...yeah...just comment on it

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    The voices in my head
    won't stay silent
    always burning and returning
    bringing bak the pains of the past

    The yelling is madness
    cutting into my skin
    always searing and tearing
    returning the burning hell I had passed

    As I scream from my prison
    the dying passion grows stronger
    always mudering and killing
    the soul I needed to last

    The dying pains are growing
    ripping through the sounds of earth
    repeting the same old curse
    Your past you'll never outlast

    Dying and crying
    this time and place
    always tring and hiding
    onlyto find my life has already passed

    Submitted on 2006-04-26 12:28:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sounds like your trapped, and past memories keep reoccuring for you. I liked the fact that you slapped it together so fast but still managed to keep your thoughts on point. My favorite Stanza was, "As I scream from my prison
    the dying passion grows stronger
    always mudering and killing
    the soul I needed to last", because it's like the more you feel the pain the more it haunts you and the stronger it becomes disallowing your to recover. So slowly your soul deteriorates from the killing of you passion.

    Nice jobe here buddy of Arson.
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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