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    dots Submission Name: I Will Be Your Saviordots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1041
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 628



    Description:
       I love her and wish to take away all her pain.


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    dotsI Will Be Your Saviordots
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    Blighted angel follow me.
    I will lead you to freedom.
    I will hold your face in my hands.
    Crying star fall to me.
    I will make the wishes that save your light.
    I will marry you in the sky.
    Raped child give your heart to me.
    I will heal your wounds.
    I will remove his searing touch from your cheek.
    Mislead sabant speak to me.
    I will listen.
    I will approve.
    Locked door open to me.
    I will delve your depths.
    I will wipe your past clean.
    Bold believer fear not me.
    I will steal your sins.
    I will save your future.




    Submitted on 2006-04-26 13:21:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow.....this is very moving and pure love speaking here :*)
    Apart from the spelling or typos
    a beautiful expession of unconditional and unselfish pure Love
    I love this piece.....It had a strong vibe
    Its a fav
    Keep up the great works
    Love
    Nadine
    God BLess
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]


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