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    dots Submission Name: The Angeldots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Angeldots
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    As she walks through the field
    The night stands watch in silent awe.
    The stars smile and reach for her ivory skin.
    The moon beams as a father holding his child.
    Watching from afar he falls in love.
    An Angel wanders before him.
    The wind sighs her name "Brandi"
    He listnes.
    He holds back.
    Can perfect creatures such as her
    Fall for a beast such as him?
    He fears not.
    She walks near and spots him in the dark.
    "Come to me dear man" she whispers.
    Silently he drifts into the open, into her arms.
    Surprised he notices she does not wince.
    She holds him,
    Calms him.
    She saves him from his cold fate.
    She whsipers in his ear.
    "To long have hidden, fled, and cried. I am yours, you are mine. Us against the world for all time."




    Submitted on 2006-04-26 13:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is very beautifully written. i like the line..the winds sighs her name brandi. its very pretty. its a romantic and very clever piece of work. she must be your angel!
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      *smiles* i love you.

    break up the last line
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Brandiness | [ Reply to This ]


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