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    Author: MyLastBlkRose
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 609
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       this is my poem, ya I know it is intense, but it comes from the heart, i just won a small contest with it, I came in second out of 500..not bad I guess lol


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    Im bound to the earth At my feet

    I hear the footsteps of shadows around me...

    I cant move, I can only try to struggle free

    The Earth holds me prisoner

    Prisoner of war...the war of life

    I wish to so easily step out of this world...

    Its not as easy as I wish it to be...

    I cant move, I try and try, I scream for help

    I scream in pain, and agony, and all I hear is my echo

    There is no one, no one to save me, to help me, to free me

    Life is keeping me captive, and slowly, day by day...

    Im dying, dying on the inside, my soul shattered

    My Heart is broken, my arms are slashed...

    I didn't do it...they made me...It takes away the pain

    But only for a minute...so I cut once more...and continue

    forever, its a never ending cycle...my feet are bloody,

    My Hands are rough and bruised. My eyes are swollen,

    Swollen from holding all the tears that fight to get out...

    So I scream some more, and hope to be heard...

    Echos...is all I hear.

    See my secret is, the gurl I speak of..dwells within...

    The Real Me...I have a shell...

    A shell with the strength of a thousand men.

    I try to break free but all that happens is...

    Nothing...nothing at all. So I scream at the top of my lungs

    And you see a smile...My Soul howls and crys...

    And you see a smile...My Arms are cut up...but covered

    So all you see is a smile, that sits falsly upon my lips...

    You come to wish me goodnight...all you see is your happy little gurl. I smile, and say I love you. but realli im saying:

    look into my eyes, take my hand, see the real me...help me

    look under the long sleeves...ask about the myserious blood.

    But You don't, you shut out the light, and whisper goodnight

    I grab my blade and push along my skin...its routine

    I do it every night, when all thats awake is the shadows...

    I push harder and harder...Im fighting to be free from...

    this fake picture of me... I didn't paint it...I don't like it

    So I try to break free...All of a sudden...the room spins..

    And for once the smile on my face is real...blood flows...

    But im smiling...a real smile, the room begins to fade,

    and my conscience starts to call. The room becomes so dark

    Than suddenly so light, I close my eyes and feel...

    Feel...Content...happy...I feel my last breath, so I...

    Breathe Deeply, and whisper goodbye...When you find me..

    Don't cry, realize im smiling...for real...You'll see me one

    day...and when you look at me and tell me you love me,

    I will smile, smile so big, and hug you so tight...and tell you

    ...that I love you... And Tell you of the gurl I realli was...

    And of the gurl I will be then...Goodbye...I leave this

    Earth, with a smile...a real one. Im Free, No longer a

    prisoner of war...war of life..Im happy...so smile for me!




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      I thought this was structured very very well. It told a clear story and the description used was first rate. Well done - a really good write.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]



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