Description: hmm.. perhaps a little bitter today about something...
not to sure about what
Golden Shine -------------------------------------------
They say these are our golden years.
I hope for something more.
There is billowing smoke in today’s sky
grey smoke in our eyes.
Dance in the ashes that rain down
Kill time smudged in black soot
Or is it time that is killing us?
We are only flesh and bone
As we make love to computers.
And pray for silken Angels
Drenched in silk lingerie.
They say this is our time to shine.
I hope that I am dark and dull.
Taste today on the tip of your tongue
Taste it as the world dissolves.
Wash away the dirty aftertaste
Drink time away like rum
Or is it rum that is a waste of time?
We are only red blood and brains
The faster we live
The more that die
Who built us our home?
This was thought prevoking. I liked it but you seem a little down? I take it you don't like our TEC world we live in? I live in a small town and everything is pretty slow and laid back, everything is lush and green. I understand the way you feel, I worked for a company that had 2000 employies and we made every kind of computer chip for everything from cell phones to gamming systems it was all very fast paced and some time you just wanted to pull your hair out. Back to your poem, got side tracked. I think our feeling make us write the best poems. This my be a long way from being the best in the world but it is very good and I like your style. Keep it up and maybe someday we will be see your stuff in a book store? Thanks again for a good read!!! Kelley Frost
This is a good poem. It expresses your feelings and anger very well. In this day and age, it seems our world is a very hostile place to live. I dont blame you for wanting no part of it cause honestly, I dont either. I have taught myself to be aware, yet continue to live my life as much as I can and be happy. Ultimately, happiness is what it's all about in life and even though the world is evil, I can still live my life to the fullest and find the happiness that is so important. I hope you do the same. Just live well! Take care.
Yeah, I can see you were a tad bit bitter with this one dear. I enjoyed it. I get the feeling you are saying the worl is going to hell in a hand basket and you want no part of it. the glitter and gold, fakeness, you rather be you and considered dull. Deep and good message you have here. Overall, this was very good.
Hmmm...sounds like a letter that ones Almighty should read. I liked the questions in it and thought they added a unique hint of sarcasm to an age old philosophy, ya know?
Submission Name: Golden Shine
