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    dots Submission Name: The Messanger of Lifedots
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    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 982
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 949



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       it's kind of dark, hope you like it, tell me what you think.


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    dotsThe Messanger of Lifedots
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    Clad all in black
    She takes your breath.
    You know quite well
    Her name is Death...
    There is no pity in her eyes
    And you will never see her cry.
    She doesn't need an alli or a partner
    For only in you darkest hour
    Will she come.
    She bathes you in laughter-
    The brightes, presious memories you have
    You go on to another World,
    Death is you guide to the Beyond,
    Once there, you are alone.

    The Judgemnt Day has come,
    Delema strikes:
    Should you be given or recieved?
    And you are able not decieve
    The Oracle of Life.
    She sees right through you,
    Oh, she knows
    The best kept secrets of your soul
    No longer hide within you.
    For you are trully free
    And if her eyes glow at your sight,
    You go to Heaven.
    And if not...
    You go to Hell,
    where you shall rot.




    Submitted on 2006-04-26 17:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it Xana! Especialy the part about rotting in Hell ;)
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      I take it you like writing about dark and depressing things ?

    Again, well written and thought out. Would like to see you exploring other topics though.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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