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It's Funny Because You Think I'm Kidding


Author: Amissa
ASL Info:    18 female NWIndiana
Elite Ratio:    8 - 5 /1 /3
Words: 169
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Completely unrevised thing that I threw down right this second. I hope you find it amusing. It doesn't seem angry to me. I thought of it as comical irony.


It's Funny Because You Think I'm Kidding



Smile and laugh
Love and Sing
And she's just the sweetest thing

So you take advantage
Push her just a bit
To see how much she takes
"Careful dear"
Warning from a smiling face
"I might bite back someday"
We laugh it off and continue chatting

And it's funny
Because you think I'm kidding

Angel wrapped in pastel pink
A tiny harmless waif
She complains when you stomp on bugs
And begs you to treat your cat with kindness
"Careful dear"
Warning in a loving tone
"One day it'll come back to you"
And we carry about our merry way

And it's funny
Because you think I'm kidding

And you never knew your pastel angel
Could hit so hard, did you?
And you never knew what it was like
To be stomped on before now.

I just smile into your eyes
I bet you never thought I could be cruel
"Careful dear"
Warning from soft innocent lips
"Don't try to call my bluff"




Submitted on 2006-04-26 21:32:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice and original. I like the concept. The repitition of the line:
And it's funny
Because you think I'm kidding.
It works well. You might think about putting that line at the end too. Tie a nice bow around the whole poem. Great job.
| Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Scribner | [ Reply to This ]


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