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Endless Love Uknown

Author: POETRY
ASL Info:    17/f/az
Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259 /141 /37
Words: 105
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This was written a while back to a guy that I had known for a short while but I fell in love with quite quickly and this was me. I just wrote it in third person I hope you enjoy and tell me what you think

Endless Love Uknown

Endless love that has lingered in her heart,
A special love that sets them apart
Longing for those words of wisdom to finally come around,
Hurting because she was left to know she was only let down.
She said she was in love but did not know the real meaning
And trapped inside with so many different intense feelings.
Crying and trying to let all her anger subside
Upset because she lost her sense of pride.
She loves a guy she hardly knows
Wishing this love would soon grow
As shes lost in a daze,
Her feelings remain the same.

Submitted on 2006-04-26 22:54:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmm i never think that a girl can be as desperate as guy when it comes into loving someone special. Its a good writing, but maybe you can differ each part with stanza. Well now i know that a girl can be more desperate than a guy, since they have dignity. Btw dont worry you need to go to the deepest vally in order to see a high mountain.

| Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm kinda makes me feel guilty from a guys point of view. However thank you. It was a long ago relation I could only imagine she had a similar view as to you.
A well written poetic view. I can see your words written in her eyes. Something that time does not well disguise.
| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate to this poem as I'm sure everyone else could too, I'm sure we've all gone through this before.
You are a good writer, keep up the great work and have a great day!
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Christina,

I'm back! Gone on vacation fer a while and had just a hell of alot of things going on. Anyways This was really... Well I don't know what to say. I like the way you worded it and the way it flows but what the hell do I know I love anything that comes from the heart. Hope to hear from you soon.

| Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Darkestlove | [ Reply to This ]

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