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    dots Submission Name: (Unfinished) Unconsciousness of Realmsdots
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    Author: siroez
    ASL Info:    27/Male/WV
    Elite Ratio:    5.23 - 101/87/44
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 1264
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots(Unfinished) Unconsciousness of Realmsdots
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    Unconsciosness of Realms

    'she fell through the hole transcending into the (depths of serenity)
    placing these mirrors into (tridimensional ascension) to change her idenity'

    'reflecting the void of condordance through the ever last (effect of dissonance)
    (ever changing shapes of reality) and pre dimensions of ressonance'

    (realms of consciousness and awareness) harmony is beauty +"




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 05:56:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, maybe I'm just not one for using a lot of big words, but it really feels to me that you pulled out your dictionary or thesaurus when you wrote this one.
    This is good for what it is.
    And I don't want to offend you, but it's a lot easier and more enjoyable when you read something realistic. And by that I mean it sounds like something you can hear someone saying. These words are meant to just flow nicely from the lips.
    I really do think it was a good poem, though. It is well written and it reminded me of something Lewis Carol might write. :)

    Keep Writing
    Caribou
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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