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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 897
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1618



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    dotsunknown poemdots
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    Around the corner I have a friend,
    In this great city that has no end,
    Yet the days go by and weeks rush on,
    And before I know it, a year is gone.
    And I never see my old friends face,
    For life is a swift and terrible race,
    He knows I like him just as well,
    As in the days when I rang his bell
    And he rang mine but we were younger then,
    And now we are busy, tired men.
    Tired of playing a foolish game,
    Tired of trying to make a name.
    "Tomorrow" I say! "I will call on Jim
    Just to show that I'm thinking of him."
    But tomorrow comes and tomorrow goes,
    And distance between us grows and grows
    Around the corner, yet miles away,
    "Here's a telegram sir," "Jim died today."
    And that's what we get and deserve in the end.
    Around the corner, a vanished friend.
    Remember to always say what you mean.
    If you love someone, tell them.
    Don't be afraid to express yourself. Reach out and tell someone what they mean to you
    Because when you decide that it is the right time it might be to late
    Seize the day. Never have regrets.
    And most importantly, stay close to your friends
    and family, for they have helped
    make you the person that you are today.
    "I love you" don't just think it, pick up the phone and say it!
    Not later today, not tomorrow, not next week,
    Cause this second may never get a second change!!




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 07:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Alright, not bad, but if you're going to insits on having the meaning in there, I'd at least seperate the stanzas. I can appreciate the meaning behind it, and it's done well enough; but that added meaning thing really deteriorates from the rest of it. Many people don't like being spoon fed the meaning behind a write. And this one seems obvious enough. see you around.
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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