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    dots Submission Name: a letter from heavendots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1140
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsa letter from heavendots
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    The sky darkens, the clouds go boom.
    The people of the world panic, I enter my room.
    On my scribe desk, are the hearts of gold.
    I open this letter that now appears before me.
    It sang, it cheered.
    We need this now, and in further years.
    Is this I have found, my one wish? My connection?
    Words from a loved one that I truly missed.
    My grandson, I read with a tear in my eye.
    I know what you want to be, I heard in my head.
    Your secrets are safe with me in your heart.
    And with that bond that we share, we are never apart.
    The clouds burst open, not with joy, but with tears




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      a letter from heaven
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    "The sky darkens, the clouds go boom.
    The people of the world panic, I enter my room.
    On my scribe desk, are the hearts of gold.
    I open this letter that now appears before me.
    It sang, it cheered.
    We need this now, and in further years.
    Is this I have found, my one wish? My connection?
    Words from a loved one that I truly missed.
    My grandson, I read with a tear in my eye.
    I know what you want to be, I heard in my head.
    Your secrets are safe with me in your heart.
    And with that bond that we share, we are never apart.
    The clouds burst open, not with joy, but with tears "


    Moving and enticing. It draws you into the world of the poem. Only wish the tale continued. It would have been awesome to find out. :_)
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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