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    dots Submission Name: bluebelldots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 949
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 331



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    dotsbluebelldots
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    YOUR PETALS REFLECT THE SUN AND THE
    SPRAWLING OF A RIVER
    BLUE OR WHITE YOU ARE STILL LOVLEY
    I SHALL LOVE YOU FOREVER
    AND ARE BETTER THAN HONEY OR MONEY


    MY EYES WATCH YOU IN THE MOON
    HOW WILL SEE YOU SOON
    YOU ARE A MISTY BELL
    I WILL NEVER SELL




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 07:48:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi draconus sweetie Elley here.. i agree with caotic disaster. but its a really nice poem
    | Posted on 2006-11-30 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this and I thought it was very original. The first stanza was very good but in the second stanza, where you wrote

    How Will See You Soon

    I thought that was a little confusing. I don't know if you had typed it in wrong, or if it is just me that it sounds a little funny too, but maybe consider fiddeling with that line. Other than that. I really enjoyed your poem. Awesome job and keep writing. :)
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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