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    dots Submission Name: creswell collerydots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1048
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 884



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    dotscreswell collerydots
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    YOU’VE HEARD OF THE CRESWELL DISASTER
    THE TERRIBLE PRICE WAS PAID
    SEVENTY-SEVEN MEN WERE LOST
    AND THREE MEN OF A RESCUE BRIGADE


    IT OCCURRED IN THE MONTH OF SEPTEMBER
    SEPTEMBER THE TWENTY-SIXTH
    AT THE FOUTH AND A HALF HOUR
    AND WHAT HAPPENED IS THIS


    IT STARTED WITH A CONVEYER BELT JAMMING
    A JAM THAT BURST INTO FLAMES
    EVERONE TRIED TO GET OUT
    AND YET NO ONE WAS TO BLAME


    DOWN THERE IN THE DARK THEY ARE LYING
    THEY DIED FOR ONE BOB A DAY
    THEY WORKED SO HARD AND NOW MUST LIE
    LIE UNTIL JUDGEMENT DAY


    ON THE TENTH OF SEPTEMBER
    SEPTEMER AT THREE FORTY-FIVE
    THE POET OF THIS POME WAS BORN
    AS I ENTERED INTO THIS LIFE I HAVE NOW
    THE PIT AT CRESWELL DID CLOSE




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      Nice poem! I liked the fourth verse best though
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]


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