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    dots Submission Name: feardots

    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    My heart is corrupted by darkness.
    It races round to get out of this prison.
    I am falling down deeply,
    Silently, softly and carmly.
    I fear the worst.
    What will happen to my family?
    What will happen to my friends?
    Whatís happening to me?
    I can see nothing but the dark.
    Shadows coming towards me.
    Slipping, sliding and creeping.
    What are they doing to me?
    I now see a light.
    Small but visible.
    Where is it from?
    I know!!
    Itís from my heart.
    I must make the light stronger.
    Think Damian think.
    Of course my family my friendís
    I think of my family.
    Mum, Dad, Brother, Sister.
    I think of my friendís
    Everything they have done for me.
    Stronger the light is I still have my life.
    Or is it my turn to go.
    My turn to be someone.
    My chance to take a risk.
    The ground is visible.
    I am ready.
    For my big performance

    Submitted on 2006-04-27 07:50:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i understand but maybe fear is the wrong title for it, maybe troubled mind/heart
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it and I liked how it flowed and all that, I just don't really understand what it is about. I was thinking maybe war, prison, something like that, maybe even hospital. I really got lost with all the different things said within this poem. Good writing, just I found it a little confusing..but I'm only one person out of everyone in the world. Keep writing. :S
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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