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    dots Submission Name: Historydots

    Author: sussysabaslice
    ASL Info:    20/f/pennysylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.68 - 29/49/33
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1138
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       it's sloppy but i had to rush...class is almost over

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    shredding papercuts
    and the criss-cross of your smile
    forms a jagged x i want to tear ap ar t

    (all we need are knives and wine)
    let's get this party started
    self-infatuation humiliation
    you know they say you can't win
    until you fail so let's crash and
    burn and admire the bourbon flames
    slicked red down our throats and
    (all we need are knives and wine)

    a glass heart you could break
    spindle throat like a coronary vein
    (block it with your drowning promises
    and we'll laugh as the cells start dying)
    a lack of oxygen in your kiss
    suffocation made thick like wine
    (oh, sweetness, i'm only joking, like
    placebo my anti-drug sugar pills)

    this is me laughing because it's so easy
    when you're all alone and splitting smiles
    down the center aisle walk sullied miles
    in ideas you thought were for someone else
    (you never saw yourself in white more than
    torn black eyeliner and sky-slicked skin)
    and i'm laughing i should have known better
    to expect things would work out right for once

    maybe it's my last chance to say
    i live in patterns: look, chase, catch
    i live in shatters: drop, fall, away
    maybe it's my last chance to hope
    you'll find someone else to torment
    (a you, a me, a someone different i don't care
    i'll probably imagine a supermodel and place her with you)

    and i'm looking at the look on your face
    and laughing because it's so predictable: all this
    that i'd be bored and yet not able to let go
    that i am creating drama for the sake of it

    and losing control again
    is just another pattern
    is just another same old
    (the same as knives and wine
    glass choking sugar pills:
    all i need to tear apart)

    shredding dollar bills
    and the numbers of the presidents
    spell yours i know by heart

    Submitted on 2006-04-27 08:42:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This almost sounds like a song I've heard before...
    but it's your own and it's a great work of art; keep up the great work. Now get back to paying attention in class! LOL!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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