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    dots Submission Name: I'm Already Gonedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsI'm Already Gonedots
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    You can cut me so I bleed,
    but I won't shed a tear.
    You can kick when I'm down,
    but I will not lie there.

    You can tell me all your lies,
    but I will see the truth.
    You can try to hide your crime,
    but I will find the proof.

    You can set a fire beneath my feet,
    but I won't feel the burn.
    You can try to play your games with me,
    but I won't take a turn.

    You can give your heart and soul to me,
    but I will give it back.
    You can cry until your tears run dry,
    but I will not react.

    You can dig a hole and throw me in,
    but I'll still stand my ground.
    You can scream your painful words at me,
    but I won't hear a sound.

    You can say you'll never leave my side,
    but I'm already gone.
    You can tell me that you're here for me,
    but I am much too strong.

    You can talk until your speechless,
    but I won't change my mind.
    You can chase me till your legs are stone,
    but I've already left you behind.




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 08:52:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this very much. It seemed like the person here has outgrowned the original mistreatment from this person and has no fear to leave now. Nothing can be done to break her spriti, for the love is gone now. With no love there, it don't matter what the other do to try and get you to stay. I thought this was good. The flow could be revised though. Overall, really good.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-04-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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