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    dots Submission Name: Frustratably Self-manipulatingdots
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    Author: kaoriliveshere
    ASL Info:    19/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 5/10/10
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Well, if you really want to know the meaning of this poem then PM me or get me on MSN


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    dotsFrustratably Self-manipulatingdots
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    If I want it; I can have it.
    My seperate emotions will colide
    To form visual images in my head
    That will help me in the sooner then later.

    If I need; I have to fight for it.
    My mouth will not help me through
    The desire of push and pull-
    My heart sings until many beats kill me.

    My body throbs with heat
    That only felt if someone is close
    Enough to use me like a puppet
    In a fifteen minute story that was turned into a movie.

    The long felt desire feeling in my stomache
    I can sometimes control with self inflicting pain
    That leaves dents inside my rusty truck
    When Frustration is working at its best.




    Submitted on 2006-04-27 10:33:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow thats a great way to discribe things ur very creative in your words

    The desire of push and pull-
    My heart sings until many beats kill me.
    thats pretty deep a bit confusing maybe but still great i really liked how u discribe your feelings only the stomach part was a bit nasty to me only b/e im home sick ....very sick nice write

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay the song is about wanting sex. you give it yourself. I hope that makes sense to you now,
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by kaoriliveshere | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting subject if I can say so. Passion always makes good poetry when it comes from the heart. Emotion flow with the words, but not everywhere though, which makes me think that some parts were ampliphied to put a bit of tragdy in it. It may not be true, but if it is, my only advice I could give you is: Always write with your heart and not your mind. Try to write your poem as it comes out, without forcing anything, and then replace a few words without replacing the meaning to create a good flow.

    This is an awesome work of poetry anyway, I'm looking forward to see more of yours.

    -Gothik-
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Gothik | [ Reply to This ]


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