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    dots Submission Name: Desire Everlasting by Leslie Hartdots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 890
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    Description:
       Leslie wrote this poem for her boy friend and i asked for a copy for on her cuz yall should be able to read her great words that she chants aloud and puts a spell on ever y one listin' ..
    any way hope you like


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    dotsDesire Everlasting by Leslie Hartdots
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    Tears of joy to hear those words uttered from your lips
    caressing tracing subtle contures with my finger tips
    my mind turns joy to sorrow
    suddenly a fear of not having with you another tomorrow
    your tears and mine
    fear calmed we are just fine
    back to the thoughts of before the same ones as in the wood
    I love you ... this all feels so right and good
    mind shatters going through memory
    Right here right now just you and me
    storm running through
    see some of the same qualities in you
    Eyes quick silver fire
    kisses soft sensuous , and filled witht desire
    warm soft embrace
    sudden building pace
    skin on skin
    tounges plungeing out and in
    lips wandering and then lingering quick to long with running of a tounge
    Breath faster harder sudden gasps all air expelled from my lunges
    Hit a certain spot do that certain thing feel the reaction
    my desire for distraction
    wishing for these moments to last
    they keep passing way to fast
    just to be here in your arms
    the heat off your skin could set off alarms
    rythm and beat
    taste and feelings so sweet
    voice a sublte drifting alluring like some far off instrument
    your whole self , my love, seems heaven sent





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