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Alcoholic Tendencies


Author: chilz
ASL Info:    20/F/WA
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 137 /147 /84
Words: 115
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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persona. yeah the rest you can guess


Alcoholic Tendencies



Time can heal all wounds,
Time is what I don’t have
I’m bleeding to death here on your bed
Just a dream just a dream
Last nights regrets come up and out of my throat
So many faces cover your walls staring at me
Vomit lies on the floor and on my nostrils
Step back, and there you are laying still
Panic hits and my legs react
Takes me away, so far away
Empty bottles and empty souls
Litter the stairwell of my mind
Visions of the previous fly back
Fighting the urge to cleanse myself again
Bad choices, so many horrible choices
You and I entangled…
In alcoholic tendencies…




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  the perfect poem for the alcholic

sorry i really cant say anythn else but that

and and and i can say good job

i think the story of the sufferer of alchol adiiction is sad

anyhoo thats all i gotta say plus i am typing with one hand so its extremely hard typing/saying wat i am saying

yo thats my story

gd job

xx
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the hidden meanings within this piece, it seems to use the "morning after" feeling to express the lament after bringing yourself into a situation that you can't control or get out of. The true definition of an alcoholic isn't simply one who is "addicted" to alcohol but one who uses substance to compensate for self trust and self control, in this case it seems your "addiction" would be the "you"(whoever you are entagled with) of this passage, nicely done :)
-TheGentlemanWhore
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]
  I really can not say what i got out of it because i really did not understand it, maybe it is my head ache, i liked it though, good work.

courtney
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by in_a_trap | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this because it explains how you want to be free of the hole you got yourself into, but you cant.
and mistakes are just happening, like you live off of pain.

At least its what I got out of it.
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
  This is powreful
This is a very important write for you to release
That I know is true
I hope and pray you find happiness
If it is you you are referring to Pleae know I have fought addiction myself and won
A long 5 year battle with meth
I am now sober one year
There is help out there
But first you have to decide for yourself
you dont need that [censored] in your life
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron

I am always here if you need to talk
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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