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Who Am I?

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
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just imagine this being screamed...

to you Randy, in words so loud it scares even you

Who Am I?

You want me to speak
to tell you what's wrong
but what am I to say
I haven't the slightest idea

Things just weren't right
I don't know why
but they are
what can I say

That my father is my bane
that I have yet to be loved
that this face reminds me of the pain
all of these you know

So what's the point
you know me better than I
so who am I
tell me now!

What am I
it's I who beseech
you know me better than anyone
so who am I?

Submitted on 2006-04-27 13:03:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hmmm....sounded like a rock song for some reason, I know, it's 'cause in your description you said to scream this. It was so nice though, not the meaning but the way you wrote it, so anger filled. No one really knows themselves till later life. Other people sometimes know you better than you know yourself, but then there is that one person that knows you completely.
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
  I know, at least I'd like to think so, where you're coming from. There are times when people aren't worth your tears or anger though, and you need to move on with your like (that was really cliché...) The poem was good. There was only one mistake that I caught. Instead of "these" it should be "this". But, it was still good.
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]

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